Voila! 3rd ever sonnet :D

Hey all, I'm back again with a brand spanking new sonnet! You know, I'm really struggling to write the prelude to these sonnets. So how about this: I'm just gonna talk a bit about myself.

The first you that you should know about me is that I'm freaking awesome. It occurs to me that I might seem a bit pusillanimous and bashful, judging from my last two blog posts. This is true to a certain extent, but I think that there's another more real extreme to me; I'm a bit socially awkward in the fact that I like to be in the centre of attention. Some call it ADD, others call it confidence. But whatever, I like to call it being awesome. 

As I'm writing this, it occurs to me: whomever found this blog post was probably just looking forward to reading a sonnet and I've probably already scared off a couple of prospecting sonnet-finders. Whatever. But to not occupy any more your time, that is if there's actually anyone reading this blog post, I think I'll just post the sonnet now.

Bear in mind, I'm not exactly the best poet of all time but I like to think that I'm halfway between decent and good. So if you hate the poem cos you have horrible taste and suck (Naw, but seriously), let me down lightly, will you? Thanks :D

Okedokie, here goes...

Taking the Leap

By Oliver Nolastname

How close to the ledge can boy and girl go,

Without ultimately making the leap?

We’re ready for the next step, this I know

Together the treasures of love, we’ll reap.

How like an ocean is my love for thee

Deep blue yonder as far as eye can see.

‘Tis invariable and unchanging,

Just as my love for you is abiding.

But three words act as a dam to my love;

Three words I cannot say, being so shy.

So do I pray for courage from above,

To take the final leap and make you mine.

And now without any further ado,

The part you’ve been waiting for: I love you…

Now time for the post-mortem of the sonnet. I actually quite like this one, I think that out of the three I've written so far, this is the best one. For one, it's in perfect Iambic Pentameter, holding it's form in every line. For another, I think it flows off the tongue, even though it's hard for me to be objective and unbiased; it being my poem and all. On another topic, this time it's not Shakespearean, cos I'm crazy and I like to mix things up. But yeah, this sonnet isn't a Shakespearean sonnet because the rhyme scheme is ABABCCDDEFEFGG as opposed to ABABCDCDEFEFGG.

Well, look at the time! Dear me, I have to go; things to see and people to do. Or something like that. 

Oliver Nolastname

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My first ever sonnet!

Hey guys, this post is a first for me. You see, I'm secretly a poet. That's why, as an outlet to my excessive creativity, I've decided to make a blog to exhibit my poems! Also, I've decided to remain anonymous. Although I will reveal that my first name is Oliver.

Alright, enough with all the talk; since most, if there are any of you out there, of the people who clicked on the blog post just wanted to read a sonnet for whatever reason... perhaps since you need one for school? Or maybe you want to give it to a special someone, I dunno.
Okay now I'm going to briefly preface my sonnet with a short explanation of what a Shakespearean sonnet is, although I think the majority of you probably already do. Okay, first of all you need to understand what an iamb is. An iamb is essentially metric foot of poetry, it's distinguished by the fact that it follows the rhythm of an unstressed syllable and then a stressed one, for example, the word 'about'. The 'a' in 'about' is unstressed and the 'bout' in about is stressed, therefore, it is an iambic word. Also, the word pentameter refers to five metric feet. Therefore, an iambic pentameter, is essentially just 5 counts of 'da-DUM'. Also, what defines a Shakespearian sonnet is that it consists of 14 iambic pentameters, rhymed in the 'a,b,a,b,c,d,c,d,e,f,e,f,g,g' format, essentially just three quatrains (4-lined stanzas) with a friendly couplet added in at the end.

Alright, now for the moment you've all been waiting for (Or just skipped everything and scrolled down to see), my poem.

Alright, since this is the first time I'm showing anyone, apart from a Literature teacher, a poem that I made, I'd like to ask any readers to not be too critical, after all, this is my first sonnet. Also, don't expect too much of me; again, this is my first poem and I'm still quite reluctant to release it to the world, even the virtual world. Plus, I am just a teenager so don't expect any Shakespeare-worthy poetry.

Okay here goes (For real this time):

Costly Gems
By Oliver Nolastname

Her eyes have the opalescence of jewels,
Glimm'ring in the soft pale light of the Sun.
We are here together, two love drunk fools,
Alone in the pasture where two b'come one.
I have seen rubies, beautiful though flawed,
But no flaws can I see in those brown eyes.
So do I pray to the kind and loving God;
For giving unto me the ultimate prize.
But how could I hope to keep her happy,
Without the s'pposed boon of loose pursestrings?
For what could this angel see in me,
Apart from being able to buy her things?
O' sweet Darling, would you please stay with me,
If I promise to do my best to keep you happy?



Now for the post-mortem, after my delivery. I might be biased, but I am quite proud of this sonnet, which just happens to the 10th draft I was working on, I guess 10th time's the charm. Although I do know that not all the lines are in perfect iambic pentameter, with some irregular rhythms in certain lines and thirteen syllables in the last line. All in all though, I'm very happy I decided to post it and I'm very keen to see what all of you think of it.

To help me improve my poetry-writing skills, please comment (Or send a PM, your choice) and spread this blog around!

Now time to sign off... For lack of a better idea,

Oliver Nolastname